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- Drop 'It is used for that purpose only.', 'Nothing else is sent.', and 'no ads, no data resale' from newsletter, mockups, and consent banner - Rewrite About, FAQ, Shipping, Returns, Contact, Commissions in the same precise, analytic register as the homepage - Align FAQ plot times with the computed model (20-30 min) and edition size (25); success page link now 'Current editions' Co-Authored-By: Claude Fable 5 <noreply@anthropic.com> Claude-Session: https://claude.ai/code/session_01JWP9tY4m4hfX8WyoEQZ1kU
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<h3>The pen lifted</h3>
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<p>This page isn't part of the line. It may have moved, or never existed.</p>
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<p>This page is not in the program. It may have moved, or never existed.</p>
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<p style="margin-top:24px"><a href="/" style="font-weight:800;text-transform:uppercase;letter-spacing:.1em;font-size:12px">← Back to PLOTFLOW</a></p>
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<p>Drawn by machine.</p>
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<p>We believe a machine can make art. Not by simulating it, but by performing it. A pen plotter doesn't reproduce an image. It draws one. The distinction matters.</p>
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<p>PLOTFLOW is an independent studio. It makes drawings of Universal-Century mobile suits with a pen plotter — a machine that holds a pen and draws, one stroke at a time, following a prepared program. Every mark on every sheet was made by a pen.</p>
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<p>Every PlotFlow edition begins as a vector drawing, rebuilt from reference, path by path, for the AxiDraw to trace in ink. What the machine draws is what the machine drew: a physical record of movement through space and time.</p>
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<p>Each edition begins as vector line work, rebuilt from reference path by path and compiled to a stroke program. An AxiDraw executes the program with a Staedtler Triplus 0.3&nbsp;mm pigment fineliner on Strathmore 300 Bristol. A typical sheet takes twenty to thirty minutes of continuous drawing and ten to thirty metres of ink.</p>
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<p>The medium itself is honest. Staedtler Triplus 0.3mm fineliner on Strathmore 300 Bristol. Ink flows at a rate determined by gravity, temperature, humidity, and the speed of the carriage. No two runs are identical, even from the same path data. Minor variation in line weight, ink saturation, and pen behavior is a feature of the process. Never a flaw.</p>
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<p>Ink flow depends on temperature, humidity, and feed rate, so no two copies of an edition are identical, even from the same path data. The variation is not corrected. It is the record of a particular machine drawing a particular sheet on a particular day.</p>
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<p>We don't print. We don't reproduce. We plot. Each piece is drawn once, for one person, signed, and numbered. When an edition sells out, it is retired. The path data remains, but the physical run is finished.</p>
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<p>PlotFlow exists at the intersection of precision engineering and analog craft. The machine is the tool. The ink is the proof.</p>
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<p>Editions are limited to 25. Each sheet is inspected, signed, and numbered by hand.</p>
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<p>マシンドロー<br><em>Drawn by machine.</em></p>

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<h3>Custom Work</h3>
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<p>We accept a limited number of commissions for custom plotter art. If you have a mobile suit (or another subject) you'd like machine-drawn, we'd love to discuss it.</p>
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<h3>Custom work</h3>
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<p>A limited number of commissions are taken each year. Any Universal-Century mobile suit or another subject — can be rebuilt as vector line work and drawn by the plotter.</p>
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<h3>What We Offer</h3>
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<h3>Scope</h3>
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<li><strong>Custom mobile suit editions:</strong> any Universal-Century suit rebuilt as a vector drawing for the plotter</li>
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<li><strong>One-of-one pieces:</strong> unique commissions that are not part of any edition run</li>
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<li><strong>Custom sizes:</strong> standard 11×14″ or larger formats</li>
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<li><strong>Ink and paper options:</strong> we can work with different pen types and paper stocks</li>
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<li><strong>Custom mobile suit plots:</strong> any Universal-Century suit rebuilt as a stroke program</li>
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<li><strong>One-of-one pieces:</strong> single drawings outside any edition run</li>
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<li><strong>Sizes:</strong> standard 11×14″ or larger formats</li>
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<li><strong>Ink and paper:</strong> other pen types and paper stocks by arrangement</li>
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<h3>Process</h3>
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<li><strong>Inquiry:</strong> Email us with your subject, preferred size, and any reference material</li>
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<li><strong>Quote:</strong> We'll respond with pricing, timeline, and feasibility notes</li>
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<li><strong>Vectorize:</strong> Once approved, we rebuild the subject as a vector drawing for the plotter</li>
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<li><strong>Approval:</strong> You review a digital preview of the path before plotting</li>
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<li><strong>Plot:</strong> The piece is drawn, inspected, signed, and shipped</li>
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<li><strong>Inquiry:</strong> email the subject, preferred size, and any reference material</li>
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<li><strong>Quote:</strong> pricing, timeline, and feasibility notes follow by reply</li>
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<li><strong>Vectorize:</strong> on approval, the subject is rebuilt as vector line work</li>
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<li><strong>Approval:</strong> a digital preview of the paths is reviewed before plotting</li>
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<li><strong>Plot:</strong> the sheet is drawn, inspected, signed, and shipped</li>
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<h3>Pricing</h3>
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<p>Commission pricing varies based on subject complexity, size, and turnaround. Custom pieces typically start at $350 for an 11×14″ piece. We'll provide a firm quote before any work begins.</p>
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<p>Pricing depends on subject complexity, size, and turnaround. Custom pieces typically start at $350 for 11×14″. A firm quote is given before any work begins.</p>
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<h3>Get Started</h3>
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<p>Email <a href="mailto:hello@plotflow.io" style="color:var(--red)">hello@plotflow.io</a> with the subject line "Commission Inquiry" and tell us what you have in mind.</p>
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<p>Email <a href="mailto:hello@plotflow.io" style="color:var(--red)">hello@plotflow.io</a> with the subject line "Commission Inquiry".</p>
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<p>Questions about orders, editions, commissions, or anything else? We'd love to hear from you.</p>
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<p>We typically respond within 24 – 48 hours. For urgent order issues, please include your order number in the subject line.</p>
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<p>Replies usually go out within 24 – 48 hours. For order issues, include the order number in the subject line.</p>
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<p>Interested in a custom piece? Visit our <a href="commissions.html" style="color:var(--red)">Commissions</a> page for details on custom work, or email us directly with your idea.</p>
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<p>Custom work is quoted individually. See <a href="commissions.html" style="color:var(--red)">Commissions</a> for scope and process, or email directly with the subject in mind.</p>
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<p>A pen plotter is a machine that holds a real pen and draws on paper by moving along precise coordinates. Unlike a printer, it physically draws each line. The result is a genuine ink drawing, not a reproduction.</p>
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<p>A machine that holds a pen and draws on paper by moving it along programmed coordinates. Unlike a printer, it draws each line physically. The result is an ink drawing, not a reproduction.</p>
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<p>No. Every copy is drawn individually by machine, in ink, on Bristol paper. Because ink flow varies with conditions, no two copies in an edition are identical.</p>
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<p>It depends on the drawing. A typical 11×14″ edition takes twenty to thirty minutes of continuous drawing and lays down ten to thirty metres of ink. Each edition's plot time is computed from its stroke program and shown on the <a href="/#feature" style="color:var(--red)">Live Plot</a>.</p>
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<p>Current editions are drawn on 11×14″ (279 × 356&nbsp;mm) Bristol. Other sizes are possible through <a href="commissions.html" style="color:var(--red)">Commissions</a>.</p>
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<p>Yes, with tracked carriers. See <a href="shipping.html" style="color:var(--red)">Shipping</a> for destinations, rates, and timing.</p>
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